Stumbling is good.
The paper plate is translucent with grease. I can make out the faux wood grain of the plastic surface beneath. My book lies face flat and wedged open on the table beside me. I cannot read now. Red sauce coats and drips from my fingers as I manipulate the molten cheese and rip the crusts apart. Every bite is precious and I feed myself with both hands, fast and fluid.
Chewing is unnecessary.
Crying makes me hungry, and that's what I did today. The long swim I've been taking in the ocean of information here at Lesley finally wiped me out. It had taken a turn for the dangerous, the unhinged, and I was drowning.
Critique. It's why I'm here. I am paying for the time and opinions of qualified critics. My application included several non-fiction essays, mostly pulled from my blog, and that's what my large group took a stab at today. Taking part in critique is terribly important to a writer, especially an aspiring writer. Like everyone else here, I needed to know where my pieces were on their journey. I needed to know where the mark was, whether I'd hit it, whether I'd passed it, whether I'd lost it.
My writing is beautiful.
There is also too much of it. I overwrite every point, stepping on whatever subtle truths lie caked in the mud of the creek beds of my mind.
My narrator's tone is often arrogant, didactic, and, thus, alienating. I don't trust my readers to think. I hound them with hyperbole.
My vocabulary is elevated to a point where it becomes useless to my audience. Often, my writing lacks intent.
When I write about places, traveling to them and exploring them, I fail to make my readers feel as though they have been there, too.
My writing is beautiful.
I respect the critique of my classmates, many of whom are much further along in their study than I. In preparation for this residency, I read and critiqued work from all of them, too. I respect the critique of my mentor, Rachel Manley. So, as their words thumped across the desks and splashed into the aching pit of my stomach, I never once doubted them. It was all true. I commit the sins of arrogance and pride every day of my life, at work, at home, with family, and with friends. Why should I assume they won't infiltrate my writing?
The heat of shame crawled up my spine like a line of red ants and fanned out over my shoulders and reached for my cheeks, my nose, my forehead. I choked on the truth of it. I'd been found out. A fraud.
Not because I cannot write. I can. Not because I am not talented. I am. Not because I don't have potential. I have it.
But I entered this program with my head held high. I was plucky and perky and took notes and smiled knowingly as I recognized important concepts like old friends. When called upon for answers, I gave them. I shared my opinions about poetry and prose as if I had every right to voice them.
Where was my humility? I know I have the capacity to be humble, but it's an exercise, a truly great effort. I meant to pack it in my suitcase along with my papers and books, but I must have forgotten.
In that room today, that circle of trust and magnification, I unraveled. Though I fought against the tears, they won out after half an hour. I panicked as they escaped my downturned eyes and slid into my lap, darkening tiny, blatant patches on my cotton dress. When Rachel Manley acknowledged that I was becoming upset, I cried harder. The more I struggled, the faster I lost the fight.
But it wasn't the words that triggered the tears. Every observation made in that room was true. I do need to ground my writing and personalize it; I do need to humble my narrator so that her path to self discovery is palatable, reasonable, likeable, enviable, believable. There is beauty in my writing that falters under the layers of overkill I slather upon it. I am verbose; I am didactic. I occasionally preach.
No, it wasn't the words. It was that I hadn't been the first to see it. After ten thousand readings of my short essays, I didn't see the flaws, and so I entered the ring unaware. In the end, I was the MFA cliché, the first semester author who thinks she knows something and gets sideswiped by candor. I was caught as oblivious as a child. A foolish child.
It shamed me.
I pulled myself together, of course, and stayed on to critique my classmates' work for the next two hours. When it was over, I stumbled back to my dorm room and curled up and sobbed into my pillow.
When the tears stopped, I picked up the edited and critiqued copies of my work, and I read through the comments on every page, in seven different hands. Like lashings.
My writing is beautiful.
I can go back and make changes now. Well, maybe not now. The wounds are too fresh and I can't bear to cut poetry. Perhaps tomorrow. Tonight I'll digest pizza, mine Dillard for words of hope, and remind myself that no one said I wasn't a good writer. No one said, "Go home, Audrey. You don't belong here." This is part of the process. It just happens to be the painful part.
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Audrey Camp
I'm an American expat and freelance writer living in Oslo, Norway with my husband. I love language, adventure, dogs and classic movies.
"Oh, dear," as Jacob says (and you know how I like to quote Jakey!). What a day! Your writing IS beautiful, and you have a lovely, insightful way of bringing your readers into your stories. Wouldn't you have been disappointed, though, had they glossed over your work and made less meaningful comments? "You didn't come for fun!" (I know you know who said that!) Makes me laugh just quoting her. Anyway, Missy, AJ, Aud, sweetheart, keep your chin up, walk tall, embrace the expertise being spilled down over you and take time break away and rest. Have a crab cake! Go see the Public Garden! Take a picture by those cute little ducklings, Jack, Kack, Lack, Mack, Nack, Ouack, Pack and Quack (they're really there!)! Then say a prayer of thanks in the Old North Church! Many blessings to you...I love you. Mom :o)
Well I like you and your writing.
The fact that you can see the others' points of view, agree with the value of much of it, shows maturity, guts, and I'd venture to say, someone who is focused on becoming better at her craft. Just because it is an emotional or difficult experience, doesn't mean it isn't going to be a valuable one. You already see the validity.
I know you will stay the course, and in the end, you will appreciate this experience the more for its having helped you to become a better writer.
I love you more and more all the time.
Dad
I have very hard time taking critique too. I would be an absolute mess if I was in your shoes.
You just have to remember that there is a big difference between criticism and critique.
As for you not being the first to see "the flaws"... well, that's what those people are there for - to show you that there will always be hundreds of other opinions that might or might not match yours.
Personally, as an outside reader, from what I've read in your blogs before (if my opinion is worth anything), I think that your writing is outstanding... it completely captured my attention from beginning to end, was easy to read and follow, and showed a range of emotions. I loved it.
Keep your chin up and use the critique for what it should be - help in your future writing, learning curve, not something to bring you down.